This post is part of the September Blog Chain at Absolute Write. This month’s theme is seasons as a metaphor for an aspect of one’s writing.
A little late-season drizzle trickled onto Peter’s car as it crawled through the morass of city traffic during rush hour, just enough to get the wipers moving.
“Another lovely fall day,” said Sedena from the passenger seat. “I do wish Littleton & Associates would find somewhere tropical to send me during this time of year.”
“Sure it’s a little rainy now,” Peter said. “But in a day or two it’ll be all blue and crisp out, and all the park trees will be lit up like Chinese New Year. People sometimes drive up north to get a good gander at fall, but we’ve got all the fall you could want right here. I love it.”
Sedena sighed. “I can’t stand autumn,” she said. “I don’t want to seem needlessly contrary, but I hate it and spring. They tear at me, cloud things, make them difficult.”
A car ahead tried to exploit a gap in the traffic; rather then ruthlessly cut them off, Peter waved them ahead. “What’s to hate? Fall is about beautiful colors, mild temperatures, and that hearty bite to the air before things get too cold. And spring’s a marvelous season of flowers and rebirth after a long winter. I don’t want to seem needlessly contrary either, but I don’t see how anyone couldn’t appreciate that.”
“Not appreciate the highly variable weather patterns that make them a nightmare for people in my line of work?” Sedena said. The driver ahead repaid Peter’s kindness with an obscene gesture, which Sedena returned with gusto. “Autumn is all about death, everything growing gray and cold and the streets choked with photosynthetic corpses. I don’t like to be reminded of that. And spring…granted, there’s new life, but you also get to see the world at its most dead uncovered by snow. Spring for me is soot-choked piles of lingering snow and barren branches with nothing to beautify them.”
Peter’s knuckles whitened around the wheel. “I’m sorry,” he said. “I didn’t mean to stir up any bad memories.”
Sedena shrugged. “Forget about it. More than a little of that is my father talking, anyway. The part of me that’d criticize an artist into giving up his craft and then berate him for quitting.”
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September 5, 2010 at 9:41 pm
Interesting story. 🙂 I think you meant tropical instead of topical up top, though.
September 5, 2010 at 9:47 pm
No, the character was obviously wishing to go someplace topical rather than someplace non sequitur 🙂
September 6, 2010 at 1:11 pm
That’s a nice conversation you got there. It’s kind of intriguing too because you keep referring to the character’s job without telling us what it is.
September 7, 2010 at 4:23 pm
Thanks! The answer is out there if you care to uncover it 🙂
September 7, 2010 at 12:35 pm
I love the image of photosynthetic corpses!
September 7, 2010 at 4:24 pm
I was worried it was a little over the top myself, but when you want a character to denounce something in the strongest terms…!
September 7, 2010 at 12:44 pm
I’m with Sedena. Fall blows.
September 7, 2010 at 4:24 pm
Somehow I think comparatively few will agree with the optimistic Peter. But you never know!
September 7, 2010 at 9:54 pm
I’m with Sandra on photosynthetic corpses. Had me smiling.
I enjoyed the intensity of the conversation and the natural action around it. Nicely done.
September 27, 2010 at 5:46 pm
Thank you!
September 8, 2010 at 8:12 am
I liked the irony of the whole piece. Good word play.
September 8, 2010 at 3:54 pm
Thanks!
September 8, 2010 at 4:39 pm
That was intriguing! An excerpt like that makes the reader want more. Too bad it’s not real. 😉 I especially liked this line: “all the park trees will be lit up like Chinese New Year.” That’s lovely imagery.
September 9, 2010 at 1:24 pm
Thank you! I will say, though, that this isn’t the only nonexistent book by this particular imaginary author in the blog…should you care to dig a little deeper 🙂
September 10, 2010 at 11:08 pm
Loved it, especially the contrast between Sedena’s pessimistic outlook on Fall and Spring while Peter is taking it all in, her outlook and the traffic, with total optimism.
September 27, 2010 at 5:46 pm
Thanks! That contrast was exactly what the piece was supposed to evoke; glad it worked!
September 13, 2010 at 8:20 pm
I love the way you use big words. You’re very comfortable with them, and it makes a smooth, interesting writing style.
September 27, 2010 at 5:45 pm
I appreciate your forthrightness on the perspicacity of the tale’s vocabulary!
September 23, 2010 at 5:49 am
I love the counterpoint between these two characters. I’m more like the optimistic and generous Peter and the contrast with gritty and realist Sedena makes for an interesting interaction between the two.
I couldn’t help but wonder what Sedena does for a living when she said, “highly variable weather patterns that make them a nightmare for people in my line of work?”
September 27, 2010 at 5:43 pm
Thank you! That counterpoint was the whole reason for the piece.
If you really want to puzzle out what line of work Sedena is in, there are a few other “books” by Van Bullock in the archive 🙂